This looks really good, and I loved the rhymes and imagery. Just one suggestion though. When writing 'eyes' as a plural, you do not need the apostrophe. Otherwise, it sounded fantastic, and really rolled of the mental tongue. I also like how you did the stanzas, giving it that feel of free verse, and allowing each thought to remain separate, but also keeping the poem together as a whole being. Beautiful words, and really comforting too. The third line, "Remember who I was not who I tried to be" is probably my favorite. That part right after could probably be bumped down a line though. Love you!
Beautiful words, and really comforting too. The third line, "Remember who I was not who I tried to be" is probably my favorite. That part right after could probably be bumped down a line though.
Love you!